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Promises made but never kept
Things said but never meant
Words are lies
That cause pain

Broken trust
Dying heart
Mind fading
Body withering

You did this
With your promises unkept
And your words not meant
Creating my painful death
Bella Larson
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For some reason, when I read this, it feels as if I had just bought an emo CD, heard a song I rather liked, opened the lyrics booklet, read the lyrics out loud, while the song plays over and over again in the background.

So..*ahem* I can see the frustration and tension you have while writing this, especially over how your significant other played with your emotions, and how every time he does that, it feels as if he's killing you slowly, over and over again, with your body feeling like it's wasting away, and your mind fading away as he does that.

I can feel the sadness and frustration in this poem, and I rather like it.
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susano-hime Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013
I love it! Its easy to connect to and very well written.
NerdyAssassin94 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013
TheArtributor Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Simple and straight to the point.
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